Jika kamu ingin jadi seseorang dalam hidup,
Jika kamu ingin mendapatkan sesuatu,
Jika kamu ingin menang,
Selalu dengarkan kata hatimu,
Dan jika kata hatimu tidak bisa memberi jawaban,
Maka tutuplah kedua matamu dan fikirkan kedua orang tuamu,
Dan kamu akan bisa menghancurkan rintangan,
Semua masalh terselesaikan,
Kemenangan akan jadi milikmu,
                    Hanya Milikmu.....
                                                                                       By "Ludfiae Evyany"

IDENTIFYING PARAGRAPH WRITING

DEVELOP BY EVI LUDFIANI

NPM 12340040

WRITING 3

ü The theme in my narrative paragraph    : [NICE EXPERIENCE]

NICE EXPERIENCE

My name is Evi Ludfiani, I had an experience that can not to be forgotten, of the things that makes me laugh till that makes me feel embarrassed, so I will share my experience to all. When I was in junior high school, I was to follow the scouts in school  with my friend, I was very active with this activity, so I was chosen to be the head of my group , before the camp activities are held, every day I have to practice or learn at school and scout movement and it's very tiring. As a chairman I should give clear instructions and must prepare the ranks well. One day before the start of the camp activities, I and my group had to prepare the equipment for camping and learn how to set up a tent correctly, my group are very compact in cooperating. That morning, we went to the campsites at 07:30 am, because the campsites were so far from our school. Precisely at time 12:30 am, we arrive at the campsites, we had to take our luggage out of the car, after that we started working together again to set up a tent, in the campsites it was very crowded, everyone was wearing a brown shirt, they are looks very neat, that day everyone is busy with their respective duties. After completion of setting up a tent, because I as a head of the group then I divide my tasks to my group. The next day, is the day gathering of all members of the group, I was embarrassed because I was a very little one. All of my new friends thought that I was not a head of the group, they make fun of me, but it's not a problem for me, after that I had to go back to the tent and give information for tomorrow activity. The next day, at the time  06:00 am,  we all should already gathered on the field to carry equipment such as spoons, plates, etc, it is very embarrassing, but it was also very amazing, because we had to walk and sing a song and to hit at the gear we brought, everyone laughs along the way, we all looks like crazy person. It was very silly, but we were all very happy, no one is looking sad at that time, because all the people I see they are laughing, we all walked through the gardens and fields, we also have to look for firewood for the bonfire party and we also had to pass through deep mud carrying firewood that bonfire party and we also had to pass through deep mud carrying firewood that we get, because it was so slippery, finally I fell from the mud and all of them are looked at me and laughed at me, then  I laughed also, but it was fun. Precisely 13:30 am, we arrived at each tent and continue with lunch, and then we have to follow the race, it was very tiring, we did not have time to rest, the race begins, before we never thought that it would win, but it all happened because my group win, I'm happy, we are happy together,  that I could prove,  I could be a good chairman in leading members of my group. Finally, at the time 21:00 pm, all of group had to gather in the field and celebrate for the last day, this is very enjoyable. Finally, the next day is come, we were ready for come back to our school with  the win prizes, from this experience I can conclude that activity will make us add new knowledge , new spirit and new friends and so on, and when work together with the good then we will also get results be better. Thank you for me to tell you about my experience.

IDENTIFYING	NICE EXPERIENCE
Introductory  Paragraph	My name is Evi Ludfiani, I had an experience that can not to be forgotten, of the things that makes me laugh till that makes me feel embarrassed, so I will share my experience to all. When I was in junior high school, I was to follow the scouts in school  with my friend, I was very active with this activity, so I was chosen to be the head of my group , before the camp activities are held, every day I have to practice or learn at school and scout movement and it's very tiring. As a chairman I should give clear instructions and must prepare the ranks well.
(Body Paragraph)   (Orientation)	One day before the start of the camp activities, I and my group had to prepare the equipment for camping and learn how to set up a tent correctly, my group are very compact in cooperating. That morning, we went to the campsites at 07:30 am, because the campsites were so far from our school. Precisely at time 12:30 am, we arrive at the campsites, we had to take our luggage out of the car, after that we started working together again to set up a tent, in the campsites it was very crowded, everyone was wearing a brown shirt, they are looks very neat, that day everyone is busy with their respective duties. After completion of setting up a tent, because I as a head of the group then I divide my tasks to my group. The next day, is the day gathering of all members of the group, I was embarrassed because I was a very little one. All of my new friends thought that I was not a head of the group, they make fun of me, but it's not a problem for me, after that I had to go back to the tent and give information for tomorrow activity. The next day, at the time  06:00 am,  we all should already gathered on the field to carry equipment such as spoons, plates, etc, it is very embarrassing, but it was also very amazing, because we had to walk and sing a song and to hit at the gear we brought, everyone laughs along the way, we all looks like crazy person. It was very silly, but we were all very happy, no one is looking sad at that time, because all the people I see they are laughing, we all walked through the gardens and fields, we also have to look for firewood for the bonfire party and we also had to pass through deep mud carrying firewood that we get, because it was so slippery, finally I fell from the mud and all of them are looked at me and laughed at me, then  I laughed also, but it was fun. Precisely 13:30 am, we arrived at each tent and continue with lunch, and then we have to follow the race, it was very tiring, we did not have time to rest, the race begins, before we never thought that it would win, but it all happened because my group win, I'm happy, we are happy together,  that I could prove,  I could be a good chairman in leading members of my group. Finally, at the time 21:00 pm, all of group had to gather in the field and celebrate for the last day, this is very enjoyable.
Concluding Paragraph/Coda	Finally, the next day is come, we were ready for come back to our school with  the win prizes, from this experience I can conclude that activity will make us add new knowledge , new spirit and new friends and so on, and when work together with the good then we will also get results be better. Thank you for me to tell you about my experience.

DIRECT

a.       Red            : introduction

b.       Blue           : plot

c.       Orange       : [The character of my writing is I and all of my friends]

d.       Brown        : setting  [in the campsites]

e.       Purple        : climax

f.         Green        : conclusion

g.       Blue           : setting, time, place

ü Your writing must have purpose      :My purpose is we must be strong to do something and must confident, believe that we can do anything and keep to work together to make the best group.

ü Use clear and understandable language.

ü You can use a pronoun "I" in your narrative writing.

ü Pay attention on text organizing structure.

ü Underline your topic sentence (if any).

Posted by Evi Ludfiani..

Ø ASSIGNMENT

1.         Give description on how to write paragraph with adequate and inadequate cohesion.

·        A good paragraph is composed of coherent and cohesion. We have learned about three basic structures of well written paragraph, namely topic sentence, supporting sentence and concluding sentence. In addition to the organization, writing must also embrace coherence and cohesion.

·         Unity refers to the extent to which all of the ideas contained within a given paragraph “hang together” in a way that is easy for the reader to understand.

·         Coherence refers to the extent to which the flow of ideas in a paragraph is easily understood by the reader. For this reason, coherence is closely related to unity.

·        A paragraph is adequately developed when it describes, explains and supports the topic sentence. If the "promise" of the topic sentence is not fulfilled, or if the reader is left with questions after reading the paragraph, the paragraph has not been adequately developed.

2.      Tell more about cohesion.

·        Cohesion is interdepartmental relations in the text marked use of language elements. Cohesion concept basically refers to the relationship form, meaning that the elements of discourse (word or phrase) that is used to construct a coherent discourse has linkages and intact. Integration of Shape (Cohesion)
If the coherence associated with the content, the cohesion or coherency forms relating to the use of his words. It could be one of the main ideas put forward a paragraph, but not necessarily the paragraphs that say cohesive if the words are not coherent.

·        to create cohesion in which sentences stick together, there are two ways namely :

1)       Logical cohesion

There are two main ways to achieve lexical cohesion:

a.       Repetition of words, a number of content words are repeated throughout out the text, religious [four times]

b.       Lexical set’’chain’’, there are words which interrelate each other in the same topic area.

2)     Grammatical cohesion

This is achieved in a number of different ways too:

a.       Pronoun and possessive reference. Pronoun or more frequently a possessive is used instead of a noun.

b.       Article reference. Articles are used for text cohesion.

c.       Tense agreement, writers use tense agreement to make text cohesive.

d.       Linkers, the text also achieve coherence through the use of linkers,

3.      Write more about the difference between coherence and cohesion.

·        The difference between cohesion and coherence at something integrated or combined. In cohesion, which is integrated visible elements of the text, including the structure of the grammar. Integration of Shape (Cohesion), if the coherence associated with the content, the cohesion or coherence forms relating to the use of his words. It could be one of the main ideas put forward a paragraph, but not necessarily the paragraphs that say cohesive if the words are not coherent.Meanwhile , cohesiveness or coherence have elements like ( meaning , concepts , and knowledge ) that are combined .

·         In brief, coherence means balance. it is the appropriate connections among the sentences. One of them is called as transitional signs. The transitional signs are essential because they connect one sentence to the other. They provide a unity and a smooth shift between them. They allow the ideas and point to be presented in a very clear pattern for the readers.

4.      Show which text or sentence that shows adequate or inadequate cohesion on your paragraph by underlining or putting in the table.

IDENTIFYING	ABOUT MY SELF
Introductory  Paragraph	I will describe a little about me , and it is real ,so I will try to describe it. This is one of  the related to me both my strengths, my weakness and my flaws. in this text I will describe  just about the general of me. and, I tell you about my life such as my parents and brother, my character look like,  my hobby etc.
Identification  (Body Paragraph)	In a village known as Suryamataram village, margatiga, east Lampung. I was born, and my mother's name is suratmi and my father’s name is Samsuri.
Description (Body Paragraph)	My name is Evi Ludfiani ,and my nick name is EviLut, I was born on  26th of January 1995 in Surya Mataram, Marga Tiga East Lampung, now I am 19 years old , my skin is brown color, slanted eyes , my weight 45 kg , my height is 160 cm , I have short -hair , sweet , slightly aquiline nose, I was born in a family that is simple and hard worker. My father’s name is samsuri and my mother’s name is suratmi, my parents always  work together every day, and I always help them when I go home because I love my parents.  I am also have sisters and brother, five sisters and one brother, my sister number one and two have married and also my brother, and my sister number four have graduate from STAIN tulungangung, east java, and my sister number six still study at senior high school and also my sister number seven still study at junior high school. I am also a good natured and likes to hanging out with my friends , I am also the type of person who is simple, I have many favorite colors such as orange , blue , white and green.  A lot of people said, I look like a quiet person  but I think I am not the type of person who reserved, except that my face looks like a quiet person and I am also the kind of a good and understanding ,  I included the simple type of person , like to mingle with friends, sweet , not arrogant , loyal and helpful , I have some hobbies like reading funny stories , singing , drawing and writing daily , I really like doing it , because I think drawing is the most pleasant thing , we can imagine of drawing, ever I draw myself , my home , and others , I think I have an interesting hobby and make activities better and not bored. I prefer to spend my spare time hanging out with friends, relaxing , eating together , shopping together , because this is one of the time that can foster a sense of socializing with friends, can help each other and mutual understanding ,
Concluding Paragraph	Accordingly, that’s all about me. If there are some mistakes. I am sorry about that, maybe it is my weakness, And the last I say Thanks a lot for it.

ü The different color of blue with underlining shows adequate cohesion.

5.      You should explain why your text or sentence that you underline is categorized into cohesion.

·        Because the relationship between the inside of the marked text with the use of language elements. The concept of cohesion in reference to the shape of the relationship, meaning that the elements of the discourse of the word or phrase that is used to construct a coherent discourse has linkages and intact.

With connecting phrases together so that the whole text is clear and readable. It achieved by several methods, such as the use of conjunction. Meanwhile, cohesion refers to the ways in which texts are stuck together, the ways in which sentences are linked or connected.